Enjoy yourself, it is human-tested and thus shouldn't be really harmful to readers, as long as I know!
It's silly, how much the description takes. :D I offer you completely skip it and start with the story itself. You know, that letters after the "- - -". :DD Really, I recommend you this. But to the point (hope it's more of a gift, than punishment ;D it's short and nothing much of a..but, oh well)..:
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Oh, and 'scuse my disability to express myself without cursing and puting giggling smileys everywhere... XD
EDIT: I changed my mind, the desription is silly AS A WHOLE, rather go for this here, for your own sake... It's somewhat better then former. XD